Thursday, October 7, 2010

SINGLE IN AN ELEVATOR

Check out my 2'nd 100- flash- fiction- fiction in just 100 words!

The elevator stopped. Renu was all alone. She panicked, counted to 5 and thought:

1….."Single's sexy, SINGLE IN AN ELEVATOR’s deadly."
2….."Damn! My phone’s dead. I'm dead!"
3….."I should’ve said ‘YES’ to Shyam. Atleast, I could’ve taken that solitaire engagement ring to my next life."
4….."Boring kurta. I never wanted to be caught dead in it. Now, I'm going to be. "
5….."Ironic. That I should DIE in an eLIVEator."

The elevator finally moved. Phew. She was ALIVE.
The man in the elevator smiled at her.

One second, she smiled  
The next second, she died.
The elevator ghost man cried
For his beautiful new bride.



12 comments:

humbl devil said...

he should be happy that he got a new bride...or was he cursing his luck he got a wifey!!! :P

rantravereflect/ jane said...

@ humble devil-->
haa depends on how ya se it, but its that dark-ish tears he's shedding..

Appu said...

I am trying to understand but unable to. All I understood was: fear within the elevator when it stops due to electricity failure - ha haha
Anyways, welcome to new blog. Maybe I will be in Goa too during those early months of New Year.

Appu said...

Your blog is added within blogroll. And if possible change the old blog with the new blog within blogroll.
Blogspot blog almost closed.
Thank you.

rantravereflect/ jane said...

well fa ya understanding, she was all alone in de elevator, n well , wen it stopped she got freaked out, n was just tryin to chill- by thinking of random dead stuff.. n wen the powere was bak, she sees this guy who smile @ her n she smiles bak- but yehh, she dies of a heart attack- cos she realises the guys a ghost cos she was all alone before.

nOt anyone you know said...

lolzies.
i loved the last four lines =P

Cinderella said...

:O

Goosebumps woman! Sick!

And you're new picture is so adorable!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

@NAYK-->
:* yeh me too

rantravereflect/ jane said...

@ Cind->
gee, thanks babe, i cut my hair short now though :(
n yes, i like being sick

Ria said...

The last 4 lines were interesting! :D

sulagna ™ said...

wow!!! it took me two reads to get your story :)

Unruly Rebel said...

nice post....nice flow...nice ghost... :)

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